Priss, I have an idea that would involve basically Valin confronting Carmenia (the idea behind it being he sees her, and watches/follows her for whatever reason, and sees/knows what happens) and he confronts her about Rio and her families' ties to those who murdered his family. I just want to post it here so if you have any problems you can tell me and I'll edit it accordingly.
"He who takes a life...it is as if he has destroyed an entire world....but he who saves one life, it is as if he has saved the world entire" Talmud Sanhedrin 4:5
!Hasta la victoria siempre! (Always, until Victory!)
-Ernesto "Che" Guevarra
Sounds fine to me. I originally thought that it would be better to let some time pass, just to get all of the plot we can get, but that sounds good to me too.
Well, its posted guys, Trust me. I think its good. But, if its really that bad, I can delete it.
"He who takes a life...it is as if he has destroyed an entire world....but he who saves one life, it is as if he has saved the world entire" Talmud Sanhedrin 4:5
!Hasta la victoria siempre! (Always, until Victory!)
-Ernesto "Che" Guevarra
Well, see the way I saw it is this: This just adds fuel to the fire, as there is even more for her to consider now.
"He who takes a life...it is as if he has destroyed an entire world....but he who saves one life, it is as if he has saved the world entire" Talmud Sanhedrin 4:5
!Hasta la victoria siempre! (Always, until Victory!)
-Ernesto "Che" Guevarra
Hmmm...alright. Thanks for changing it to "bastard".
Oh, and another thing, you make her sound as though she's still considering stealing information, even after Valin found her out. I'm thinking it's almost impossible for her to steal information, considering Valin's not going to let her anywhere near any info.
I just thought that was weird that you made her sound that way, I mean, Valin's whole goal is to either evade or attack the Elven army, and he's asking her if she is still going to steal the plans from him and give them to the Elven army?
Err--hold on. Is Valin rooting for the Human Army? Or is he almost neutral like Carmenia?
Valin is for Valin. He is only using the Human army because they are closer, and thus more convienient, than other troops.
"He who takes a life...it is as if he has destroyed an entire world....but he who saves one life, it is as if he has saved the world entire" Talmud Sanhedrin 4:5
!Hasta la victoria siempre! (Always, until Victory!)
-Ernesto "Che" Guevarra
Okay...so...he wouldn't just let her steal information about the Human army...would he?
EDIT:
Ahh...I reread it for the third time and finally caught the negotiation part. By the way, is there a certien motion/bow/movement that elves do to recongnize their leaders...or prince...or something? Or should I just make one up?
Do whatever man. Its you're post. I'm just rollin' with the punches here.
"He who takes a life...it is as if he has destroyed an entire world....but he who saves one life, it is as if he has saved the world entire" Talmud Sanhedrin 4:5
!Hasta la victoria siempre! (Always, until Victory!)
-Ernesto "Che" Guevarra
Don't pretend that you don't talk like that. I know you do.
"He who takes a life...it is as if he has destroyed an entire world....but he who saves one life, it is as if he has saved the world entire" Talmud Sanhedrin 4:5
!Hasta la victoria siempre! (Always, until Victory!)
-Ernesto "Che" Guevarra
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