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Actually Siegfried told me and I already edited it. If you're dyslexic like me it's easy to get those two names mixed up, and for that I apologize.

I edited the post, just changed Alden to Adrian.

Yeah...um...I'm not going to be able to be in the storybook anymore because I am way too busy. But I guess everyone pretty much guessed that.

Duely noted.

Come on Shadow, you can think of more than that to post. If you're just going to post two lines, why bother?

It's a little confusing as to what is going on with your character, at the moment. Assassins? Tied up? Are you referring to Dreffan? How did they get this info?

I'm busy with coursework, I'm tired and my computer is frequently crahing and I've spent a lot of time trying to fix it only for it to crash in the middle of something. I'm making posts even though they are short, because I want to keep my character in the storybook.

Onto my explanation:

Hunter wrote:"You are to be freed." Despite his thoughts, Dreffan kept a straight face and a calm tone. "You will be released into my custody, come tomorrow at dawn."

Dreffan took Adrian, Becky and Sirloaz into custody, so he was meant to be guarding them.

sabradan wrote: "You're under arrest in connection with the death of General Harris!" the head guard had screamed as he and nine others charged towards the group.

The army thinks that the group killed General Harris, and so does Sighard.

Hunter wrote:He realized he couldn't move his arms. He was seated on the ground against a wall, his arms bound.

There was no untying mentioned.

Hope that explains everything.

~ Shadowsun

Come on, guys, lets get this back up!

i'm confused.

Then you should read more closely.

The Current Situation

The group has taken refuge in a cave that Zel has previously occupied. Dreffan is tied up while the group rests and eats. The horses are tied up just outside the cave entrance.

Shadow's character is rapidly approaching with nine of his men to assault the cave.

Apparently there is another group of men, rum runners, that have arrived. I vote for that detail to be stricken, leaving us with only two groups to deal with--the party, and Shadow's soldiers.

The Immediate Future

I think the group would stand against the soldiers. They would definitely win, and easily. It's up to Shadow to have his character convince us to let him live, because the group isn't exactly a merciful one.

After that, I think the group would leave. The soldiers would have sent out for reinforcements, and they wouldn't want to stick around.

Dono's Issues

I think we have a problem writing together. I'm not sure why, but it's there. There is little to no character interaction, which makes the entire thing very awkward and whatnot. I think we should all make a concerted effort to fill our posts with more depth and more character thought, emotion, and dialogue, because without it the story dies--you cant have story without characters, and no characters without character depth.

I'd like everyone to sound off--if you're interested in continuing, please do so. If you're not, also post that here. I'll be working with everyone who continues pretty extensively to see what we can do to fix it all.

Furthermore, please post some peeves you have with the storybook as a whole, because not voicing your concerns holds the storybook back.

Thanks all!

Sounding off! *snaps to attention and salutes, then makes faces at Dono*

SOUNDING OFF!

Also, in my last post I actually intended those men to be Shadow's character's group. But, this way is good too, if not better.

*raises sword in salute*
I'm here. But there will be times when I will be less active, as I work four days a week as well as school, so yeah. But I'll try and be as active as possible.

At least you don't have summer school to worry about. I have five days of school for the whole month for a new credit English course. Basically, new credit courses require you to learn one semester's worth of material in one month. I have until tomorrow morning to finish half of the book I'm reading for the class, King Lear by William Shakespeare...

Dynamo wrote:At least you don't have summer school to worry about. I have five days of school for the whole month for a new credit English course. Basically, new credit courses require you to learn one semester's worth of material in one month. I have until tomorrow morning to finish half of the book I'm reading for the class, King Lear by William Shakespeare...

I'm in summer school right now. I just got out of class an hour ago. And before that I worked for 5 hours.

Ouch...