It's awesome(and it made me realize what the "possible aspect" thing meant in the character thing, so i had to go back and edit it)! I really liked it! i just wanted to mention at the end, you said Dex saw five teens, but only four got there before him... okay, that's it the rest is PURRFECT!
Apologies for the lateness, RL stuff has been getting me down and I've not been able to give YWS the attention it deserves I might have to withdraw from the SB unfortunately.
If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put the foundations under them. — Henry David Thoreau, "Walden"
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