Looks like a solid post to me, @Buggiedude2340; nicely done! Your depiction of my character was completely accurate, and what I would imagine him doing (the end, in particular, as that's something he definitely would've noticed. I also like how you set it up for him to notice that, which was a nice touch), and it was fun reading about your character's escapades throughout the massive city. The story flowed nicely, and you did a good job of explaining the sights and sounds of NYC as well as outlining your character's personality (especially her train of thought and sense of priorities, which I found interesting since my reactions would be more like my own character's. Absolutely nothing wrong with that, of course; it adds a bit of uniqueness and depth to the story. ). So, yeah, great job!
And please, I'll only be taking like two AP classes. Or...maybe three? er...o-o
S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse a persona che mai tornasse al mondo, questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse. Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero, senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.
That was definitely a post worth the wait, @Buggiedude2340! I am grateful you have visited New York City before, otherwise we'd never have had such beautifully detailed descriptions to enjoy. The thing, as creator of this storybook, that I like the most about everyone's posts, though, is to read about the characters' reactions to their situations. Whereas Achilles had been extremely suspicious, Hippolyta seems to be far more accepting, with Midas naturally being the most trusting (which works fine for what I've planned in the meantime). As for both of their reactions to the letter, it provides much material that I can include in my next post.
@StupidSoup, it just occurred to me that I might be placing too much stress on you. If that is the case, don't hesitate to tell me. After all, Carina will only be joining later, so if you or anybody else feels like you aren't reay yet, we can make arrangements.
But the Fruit of the Spirit is love, joy, peace, longsuffering, gentleness, goodness, faith, meekness, temperance: against such there is no law. — Paul the Apostle
Winter is inevitable. Spring will return eventually, and AstralHunter with it.
...I actually used Google Street View for those descriptions.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley. They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
Oh, you're using that too. SATELLITES WIN AGAIN. THAT IS ALL.
"Is there a limit to how much living I can live with my life? How will I know if I've gone too far? And why did I spend my life savings on sunglasses for a whale? I shall find the answers... to these questions."
Huh, so it turns out I wasn't the only one who did that. Neat. XD
it worked except for the fact that there wasn't any street view next to the police commissioner's office, for obvious reasons, so I spent half an hour trying to get as close as possible while cursing at whoever made the building for not making the entrance more obvious
S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse a persona che mai tornasse al mondo, questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse. Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero, senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.
Though I feel 100% dumber for apparently being the only one who didn't even know Google Street View existed, I nevertheless applaud your descriptive skills.
I also ask that everybody /please/ like all the posts you have read. I know it's easy to forget, but the sooner it becomes a habit, the better. It takes only a few seconds to click anyway. (The reading takes a bit longer, but I'm sure none of us have a problem with that.) But thank you Fox and Wolfe for being on it.
But the Fruit of the Spirit is love, joy, peace, longsuffering, gentleness, goodness, faith, meekness, temperance: against such there is no law. — Paul the Apostle
Winter is inevitable. Spring will return eventually, and AstralHunter with it.
Haven't finished reading them yet, so that's why my Like's not there, personally. I feel like I should finish my post first, and I'm still quite a few scenes away from that, so yeah. I'll Like 'em all eventually.
"Is there a limit to how much living I can live with my life? How will I know if I've gone too far? And why did I spend my life savings on sunglasses for a whale? I shall find the answers... to these questions."
But the Fruit of the Spirit is love, joy, peace, longsuffering, gentleness, goodness, faith, meekness, temperance: against such there is no law. — Paul the Apostle
Winter is inevitable. Spring will return eventually, and AstralHunter with it.
Marvelous post, @Rydia! I love how innocent and naive Marala is. ^_^
But the Fruit of the Spirit is love, joy, peace, longsuffering, gentleness, goodness, faith, meekness, temperance: against such there is no law. — Paul the Apostle
Winter is inevitable. Spring will return eventually, and AstralHunter with it.
Still stuck on my big second scene. Looks like Robusto's shapin' up to post before I do. Oh well! I am a Shell Master, after all. ...With a SLOW AS HECK Ampharos as an avatar, with that.
"Is there a limit to how much living I can live with my life? How will I know if I've gone too far? And why did I spend my life savings on sunglasses for a whale? I shall find the answers... to these questions."
But the Fruit of the Spirit is love, joy, peace, longsuffering, gentleness, goodness, faith, meekness, temperance: against such there is no law. — Paul the Apostle
Winter is inevitable. Spring will return eventually, and AstralHunter with it.
Me too Soup. Are you taking any of the others as well? (Hunter, APUSH stands for Advanced Placement US History, one of the many national exams we Americans can choose to take in high school. Chances are you will hear much complaining about these AP exams in the coming two weeks.)
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley. They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
). So, yeah, great job!
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