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Thu Jun 09, 2016 6:17 pm
LordZeus says...



*poke* Who's posting next? Come on guys, we gotta keep this SB alive!
  





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Thu Jun 09, 2016 11:00 pm
Wolfi says...



Me xD I'm trying to finish it for tonight.
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Fri Jun 10, 2016 4:09 am
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LordZeus says...



He was agonizingly gorgeous, yes, but what didn't quite hit the mark was the pompous way he carried himself.


I laughed way too hard when I read this sentence... :P

BTW great post! Also, your post has given me an idea for my next post, so does anyone mind if I post next? If someone else would prefer to, I'd be okay with that, considering I've posted rather recently.
  





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Fri Jun 10, 2016 4:13 am
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TheForgottenKing says...



I'd like to post, which I'm working on right now. Should be up tonight or tommorow morning.
"I make my own luck"- Shay Patrick Cormac
  





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Fri Jun 10, 2016 5:57 am
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Alright then, I'll wait.
BTW just so you know Ax only threatened to let Annabelle die to scare the truth out of her, he wouldn't actually do it, as it would go against his morale code (I was going to mention that in my post, with a life threatening scene to prove it, but since @TheForgottenKing would prefer to post first, I just thought I'd mention it.)

Also, Ax will be keeping an annoyingly close watch on Annabelle, which will include him insisting that he be in the same gyrosphere as Annabelle during the big tour (Was also going to mention that in my post), and threaten to reveal that she isn't who she's pretending to be in case she tries to decline. Although he won't persist in asking her about her past, his constant closeness to her will probably annoy Annabelle a lot. @Wolfical
  





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Fri Jun 10, 2016 6:09 pm
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I had a feeling that his threats were just to get information out of her. :p Annabelle's hidden ("real") personality is actually a lot like Ax's. It'll be amusing to see them stuck in a gyrosphere together.

Looking forward to reading your post, King!

Last night, I was thinking more about Annabelle's FBI stuff and what she's actually going to find out about Polk. Obviously, Polk's whole "Paradise" and "save the dinosaurs" ideas are stupid. I'm reasoning that they're only his cover-up to search the island and find a box of buried dinosaur embryos or DNA.
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Fri Jun 10, 2016 6:41 pm
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TheForgottenKing says...



It's up.
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Fri Jun 10, 2016 6:55 pm
Wolfi says...



That last line was so intense! Nice post. :)
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Fri Jun 10, 2016 7:00 pm
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LordZeus says...



Great post @TheForgottenKing ! And also, that doesn't impede anything I wanted to have in my post, so does anyone mind if I post next?
  





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Sat Jun 11, 2016 7:02 pm
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LordZeus says...



Hey guys, I've written up about two thirds of my post so far, but I'm busy tomorrow so I don't know if I'll get time to finish it. But I'll definitely have it up within the next 48 hours, so if you guys could please hold off posting till then, I'd be very grateful :D
  





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Sun Jun 12, 2016 1:04 pm
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LordZeus says...



Posted! @Wolfical I mentioned mainly your character in my post, and also a bit of Chris @LeftyWriter .

I was thinking that, on their tour (which will hopefully last enough time for some funny dialogue between Ax and Annabelle) they meet up with Carson, and his pursuer :twisted:

What do you guys think?
  





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Sun Jun 12, 2016 9:25 pm
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Haha, I loved that @LordZeus! When Ax took his shirt off... Oh man :P

One tiny mistake in your post is that Mercer was mentioned as being at the hotel, when right now he's really with Nigel at the shore.
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Sun Jun 12, 2016 10:23 pm
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Lefty says...



Hey, I'm going to be away from the computer for most of the day today, but I'll try to catch up on posts and have a post up for Chris sometime tomorrow.
Hear me out, there's so much more to life than what you're feeling now. Someday you'll look back on all these days, and all this pain is gonna be invisible. - Hunter Hayes
  





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Sun Jun 12, 2016 11:23 pm
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TinyJarStoredDreams says...



Thank you for including Alex! Working on my post now.
How the hell are we suppose to look forward to the future if we aren't sure if we will be alive in the next 20 seconds?
  





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Wolfi says...



Alex is so cute! Nice post, Tiny. :)

As always, can't wait to read yours, Lefty!
John 14:27:
Peace I leave with you; my peace I give you.
I do not give to you as the world gives.
Do not let your hearts be troubled
and do not be afraid.
  








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