(I also love how Mark has such a similar family backstory to Jei. It'll be really cool seeing how she processes everything that's going on with Jei's family, especially when she's the oldest instead of one of the youngest siblings.)
The other thing that might need to be changed is the style of the character profile. You definitely don't have to change it if you don't want to or don't have the time right now, but storybooks and CPs don't really use texting/chatspeak styles of writing outside of the DTs. They're basically like online books, so the goal is to copy the grammar/writing style of an actual book. You're free to write your posts from whatever perspective or tense you want, but it's definitely a good idea to stick to a more formal style of writing in your CPs or storybook posts.
(If you're not sure what that would look like, feel free to check out the other character profiles and the posts we have up so far! )
Also, I noticed a little problem on my end when I was checking out the order of siblings on the WriterFeedPad for this storybook.
As of right now, this is what the order of siblings is listed as:
Eldest- Glaphyra - (siren )
#2 - Asterux - [mage, twins to Glaphyra]
#3 - lia
#4 - sebi
#5 - cyr
#6 -
#7 - vento
I completely forgot we didn't end up getting seven siblings in total, so the numbers are all off. Here's a cleaner version of it, ignoring the numbers and just sticking to the ages of the kids:
Oldest Siblings - Siren & Mage
Almost the Oldest - Lia
Middle Child - Sebi, before leaving the SB.
Almost the Youngest - Cyr
Youngest - Vento
I'm pretty sure @Ventomology wanted her alien to be the youngest so they could be the baby of the family. I'm not sure about what dynamic @TheMulticoloredCyr wanted their character to have based on their character's age, so I guess the big question is if Cyr is okay with Jei being younger than Vaxtar or if it's better for Jei to just stick to the middle child slot.
Cyr, what do you think?
Edit: Oh, hey! New page.
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