Young Writers Society

Wow. The ending is really surprising but you went into it very well. It wasn't too sudden or too drawn out, so congrats on that. This isn't really my area of writing so there's not much critisism I can give, however I think this is extremely well thought-out, meaning that I wasn't confused or anything, which is good. Nice job and keep writing!

Thanks, I love getting nice people reviews

I really like this
You wrote it so well :O like you captured exactly how Kim and Josh were feeling and I liked that- the way you showed what both of them were feeling rather than just Josh. The descriptions were brilliant- especially the first paragraph- you really brought the reader right in and I felt like reading more
Hah the ending is terrible but I like it
You're a deadly writer :O :L gotta read more of your works

Alex xxx

This is incredible
Although it was short it didn't seem rushed and it was just magnificent!!
I would definitly say this was one of the best short shorties I've read xD
Great work!!

well...its been written very beautifully.... the details you have captured are very deep and nice... The ending was not what i expected it was surprising and shocking....But it was a very very well thought and good ending...sort of better than i expected...keep writing more like this....