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As I looked into her sky blue eyes and said the last words that would bind us together,(space here)husband and wife, vampire and mortal "I do", I said then we kissed. As we ran back down the isle towards our car that would take us to the airport,(space here)I was floating on a cloud(tell us more of her feelings rather that using a figure of speech). We would be together forever,(space here)as long as we both shall live. That was what the priest had said. As long as we both shall live(maybe try to italic this line, since you used this twice). That we would be forever and our love shall last forever.
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