A few comments first. This is far from my best work and I mean Far from it, theres very little character development, I don't show much about Thomas, or why she tried to kill herself. What I need most is examples of how I can do that and where I should put little tid-bits in. Thanks! Expect part two STIF (some time in the future) so this isn't the end end.
Massively edited.
Aurelia! Aurelia! Aurelia!
Aurelia couldn’t hear Thomas shout her name, but she could barely make out his face through the fog, and barely guessed that’s what he was shouting. She knew it wasn’t fair to do that to him, and he was the only one that got her so far after Joshua broke her heart and caused everything to hit the fan.
The mist and haze were clouding her vision. She welcomed the oblivion that killed the intense stinging growing in her wrists as the blood spilled out of them and onto the bathroom tiles. How did Thomas know she was doing this? How did he get into the bathroom? She had locked the door...hadn't she?
She woke two days later with bright florescent lights glaring down at her, scolding her for what she had done. She glanced down at herself and saw her wrists, and the severity of what she had done suddenly hit her, oh God! What was I thinking?
“You’re not dead you know,” he said. “Aurelia? Can you hear me?”
She groaned and nodded, she hoped that it was her parents, just some proof that they cared. “I should be dead…” she mused quizzicly, “why aren’t I dead?" She barely remembered him being there, had he saved her? The proud look on his face when he saw her turn her head told her so. "Where am I?"
“Psych ward at the hospital.”
"My parents?"
"At the bar."
She rolled her eyes, "no big news to me.” She yawned, getting tired again. The beeping of the monitor like a lullaby.
“Sleep Aurelia,” he ordered. She sighed and gave in, falling back to sleep.
Her parents signed her out two days later, and then everything went back to normal. Except she had to go see a counceler every Tuesday and she wasn't allowed to drive. Her parents didn't care if she went or not, so Thomas drove her.
Tuesdays after Tuesdays passed, the therapy didn't do as much for her as the rides there. Therapy was trying to figure out why she loved Joshua so much, the rides there were her falling in love with Thomas.
The day she realized that was one of the best days of her life, at the same day it was the worst. Unless she counted the day she tried to kill herself, but she didn't, that was the day the happy came back into her life.
They were sitting out in her back yard, him up in the tree like he loved to do when they were younger, and her in the tire swing. "Wanna go swimming?" she asked wanting something to do to occupy her mind.
“Your suits in Columbia Central,” he pointed out, “whatcha gonna swim in?"
Her only response was a grin. She started walking to the diving board. Slowly sliping off her tank top, exposing her bra, then her skirt. The sensible part of her scholded her for doing that, but she ignored it. After all what was wrong with it? Not like her bathing suit wasn't smaller.
She could sense him following her and she turned and smiled to him, "are you going to dive in too?"
Without waiting for him to respond she kept walking. Her step was too close to the edge and she slipped. Her body crashed into the cement shaking her to the core. Her head landed on her arm, sending her a massive shock through it. She was just far enough over the edge that she slid in, the friction breaking through the numbness that the crash had created.
She opened her mouth to gasp as the water touched her broken skin, but instead of air she was met with water. Wildly she flailed around, trying to find her way up, her way out. But couldn't find it, she didn't know which way was up, which way was down, which direction she wanted to go.
A new pain formed in her ribs. It came on so swiftly and so suddenly everything came back into focus. She was being dragged up, towards the sunlight, towards the top of the water.
She resurfaced, gasping for breath and clinging to the strong arms holding her. Thomas's arms she realized slowly as he pulled her out.
"Aurelia!" he said, "can you hear me?"
She nodded, but the effort caused pain to raidate through her neck and spine. Tears spilled out of her eyes as all the pain in her body seemed to be amplified and moving her right arm slightly made her want to scream. He lifted her under her arms and pulled her to her feet. "Come on, I'll get you a blanket and then I'm taking you to the hospital."
"I don't need to go to the hospital," she protested, "really I don't."
"You're all scraped up, your arm's probably broken, so are a couple of your ribs, and I know it hurt when you nodded. You're going to the hospital."
She protested all the way to the hospital. But was in enough pain that she knew that whatever they'd do would help.
"You've got a broken arm, no broken ribs though," the doctor told her.
"What about my neck?"
"It's fine," he explained, "it'll stop hurting in a day or two. You won't need to wear a neck brace. Hop down and we'll go get you a cast."
On the ride home she stared morbidly at her cast, "I still want to go swimming," she pouted.
"We'll watch a movie about swimming instead then, would that work?" Thomas offered.
I smiled and turned to him, "that would work."
A half hour later they pulled into her drive way. She unlocked the door and pushed it open, "you make popcorn, I'll set up the living room."
"Alright."
She went into the living room and closed all the curtians, picked out a movie and put it in just as Thomas returned holding a bowl of popcorn. She smiled and sat on the couch next to him, leaning on his slightly.
"Comfy?" he asked teasingly.
"Yup," she responded.
He laughed and reached forward and grabbed the bowl of popcorn. She felt more content than she ever had before. More content than she had felt before Joshua broke her heart, made her friends hate her, and made her public enemy number one. Except for with Thomas.
The scars on her wrist were just that, scars. Memories of her past and how Thomas had been there with her through it all, picking up the shattered pieces of her heart and super-gluing them back together. The only peice missing was the peice he carried with him, weither he knew it or not. She was sure he didn't know, he wasn't quite hers.
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