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Kadie xxx
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he was always to busy drawing to notice me.
He couldn’t just forget it could he? No. He has to make me even more embarrassed.
I would change this to He has two rows of perfect white teeth, not a single tooth askew or out of place.He has two perfect rows of perfect white teeth, not a single one crooked or out of place.
I would fix this so it reads Now he'd caught me staring. He probably thought I was a freak, a loser, or something.Now he’d caught me staring he probably thought I was a freak or a loser or something.
The only thing here was that it should be I was sending him lots of angry vibes and mental messages, telling him to stop looking or smirking at me, or whatever he was doing!I was sending him lots of angry vibes and mental messages, telling him to stop looking at smirking at me.
Instead of It was a good job, it should be It was a good thing that there were harldy anyone on the bus, because at this point I was slightly hysterical and my volume level was perhaps a little too high.“I was not blushing! I was just...um...I was just cold!” It was a good job that there was hardly anyone on the bus, because at this point I was slightly hysterical, and my volume level was perhaps a little too high.
Okay, the only reason I put this in here because this line made me smile *beams* because of the bipolar thing. It just made me laugh!“Um...ok,” I said a little hesitantly. What was with the sudden change? One minute he’s teasing me and acting all arrogant, the next he’s acting all nervous and letting me look at his art. Maybe he’s bipolar.
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