Yeah, I think you should post these seperately or using little waves or symbols inbetween to signal different parts. It's too hard to tell if you've added more if you don't do one of each.
Other than that, I read your two parts and I think you have continued it well. The more you add to this, the better it gets!
PM me when you add some more!
"Woe to the man whose heart has not learned while young to hope, to love—and to put his trust in life." ~ Joseph Conrad
"Music washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life." ~ Red Auerbach
I saw some spelling mistakes and that's it.I bet those mistakes were typos.It happens to everyone, besides that its a really good story.The ending got me confused a little. Maybe next time add like a big ending that would draw the reader more in.
this is a really awesome story! great job! i really enjoyed it and cannot wait to hear more!
it really amused me is some parts which i really enjoyed (i love to laugh)
keep it up!
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