Wow. At first I was like 'what's so bad about her mom?'. Then the end part about the whip, I begin to see. Creepy, but I like it. PM me when you get back to this piece, its really got potential.
I realized that I said I'd be gone for only two weeks...but I was gone for much longer.I hope to stay on this time.
Thanks bunches, Mark! Character development was one the hardest things for me to work on in this, so hearing that makes me feel accomplished. ^_^ Thanks again!
~*Syd*~
Last edited by Lady Sydney on Sun Feb 03, 2008 1:36 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Formerly known as Silly Sydstix... as well as Aquarius Angel.
I absolutely love this. Can't wait for more. I exspecially like how you ended it. Maria seems so nice and sweet to her younger daughter and then she turns all cruel..
I wouldn't want to meet that woman in the dark.
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