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Fatal love



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Mon Dec 06, 2010 8:18 pm
rememberme says...



I loved the fatal attraction part at the end(:. I thought this story was put togetrher in a hurry and should be in more detailed and more lengthy. I love how you make your points but I think you could add more to it, and it could be alot better. I loved how you wrote it. Good job.
  





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Thu Jun 09, 2011 9:55 pm
Scarlet15 says...



This little piece is really good. I don't see anything wrong with it. x)
  





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Thu Jun 09, 2011 10:02 pm
Scarlet15 says...



I love how it's written in "poem form". It's very interesting and it explains a lot. I didn't find any mistakes but overall I thought it was really good. :3
  





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Mon Jun 13, 2011 5:56 am
TheEaseDropper says...



I really like this, and it's so true. Even though I have never been in a realatioship I felt the pain and the hardness of being dumped.
TheEaseDropper :)
  








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