Blue Boy
Christi was a very nice person but nobody not even her truest friends could see she was lonely and sad no one seemed to see the sad girl hiding behind the mask of supporting smiles and kindness. She was lonely ever since she had to give away her dog Destiny when she moved away from her dad’s house after her parents’ nasty divorce. She was looking for something or someone that could feel her pain share it with her, see the heavy sadness that weighed her down to the lowest of low. Then it appeared on her laptop screen like an answer to her prayers a friend request from a boy that would save her from her sadness a boy named Ben blue boy.
Ben didn’t like his school he was always very sad after his mother died suddenly his life just turned completely blue. He change his name to Ben blue boy after his mom died because she always used to look at him when he was upset and ask “why so sad blue boy?” it was a nickname she had made for him so he felt the need to change his name after she died. Then one day his sadness just seemed to blow away…he met a girl named Christi on a chat room while he was on the computer at home living with his grandma during the summer they hit it off like that, it was like magic. She made him feel alive again instead of lonely and miserable like he was at school. They constantly talked on the phone and emailed each other. As time went by they became the best of friends it was a great thing Ben knew his grandma should be in a retirement home because of how old and needy she was becoming so he call his mother’s sister, his aunt Jen and told her his proposal. She knew he needed a place to stay and told him to come and live with her and his uncle Jeff and she wouldn’t take no for an answer. Then he found out that they just happen to live in the same town as Christi. Which was absolutely perfect so he told them yes, and that he was packing right away. He couldn’t wait to move in he packed his things that night and sent Christi an email telling her the wonderful news.
Christi was a kind thoughtful sophomore in high school she always helped anyone who asked her and she also had an admirer his name was Steve Madison. He had always liked her she was very pretty and never selfish he had been in love with her since the moment he laid eyes on her. He was very confident that she would go out with him but something or I should say someone unexpected interfered.....
[color=#8000BF]-Ok this is my first large piece of writing. I have more (about 38 pages) but, if nobody likes this much of it ?The whole novel isnt worth much. I'm not going to lie, it gets very romantic and even turns dramatic as the story line contiues. The love triangle doesnt actually start to take actual shape until later in the story. my simple question to you is:Will people even want to read into it? Does it have enough pull to make the readers read on?[/color]
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