Heat

Hey. I thought this a good piece. You did well with the internal struggles of your MC. Only thing I would've liked is a little detail. We have no idea who these characters are. We're just immediately dumped into the sex. How did it lead up to this moment? Was there any hesitation before they began this? Are they friends?

Otherwise, I liked it. Be watching for more.

ahhh, such a controversial topic to post a story about. i'm glad you didn't come right out and state that the MC was a guy--it made it much more powerful when i looked back and said, "Oh."

you portrayed in a much more accurate and flowing way than i did in a story ten times as long as this(that i trashed before i finished) what homosexuality/bisexuality is like to someone of faith, and what it can do to the indecisive mind.

indecisive...like mine.

ahh, like everyone said, this was very moving.
you are a super good writer, i like it [:

You could really feel the emotion in it. Nice job.