This is not the final draft. There is a bunch of things i need to fix and add description. Feel free to point out what I should fix, but the main question I have is if I should continue the story because I have a whole other part I could add that could be really good.
More than a Friend
My heart is a strange thing sometimes. One day I will see a friend and the next as someone so beautiful that I want to be with them.
It all started when I was going to school one day. Just a normal day. My mom was getting mad at the traffic as we drove and one of my friends sitting in the back. We gave her a ride, because her mom had to go to work early. Well after a few more yells at crazy drivers, we made it to the safety of school and out of the roller coaster of my mom’s car. Yeah she was kind of an aggressive driver. Me and my friend walked off into separate directions, both heading towards our lockers.
The morning was always so cold. Hardly anyone was there and the dimness of the school just gave you that uneasy feeling. Oh and of course none of the building’s were open for us to escape the bitter cold.
Arms folded, I made it to the safety of my locker. Pulling off my backpack, I got on one knee to open my bottom locker. Man even my locker was like ice, cold and frozen. It was so cold, it made my hands numb.
As I was digging through my locker, I wondered why I was always here so early. I could be in my warm house not having to wait out here freezing to death.
As I was closing my locker, a voice called behind me. I turned around to see Jada. She was one of my friends from school. I met her last year in P.E. class.
“Hey Jada,” I greeted back hiding my discomfort of the weather. “What are you doing here so early?”
“Oh I had morning practice today,” she said as she opened her locker which was across from mine.
“Man you guys must’ve been freezing in this weather,” I replied.
“I can’t feel my legs,” she said jokingly. As she was finishing up at her locker, I looked back at the building I usually go to, which is the Spanish building. I go there in the morning to get away from coldness. Of course it was stilled locked.
“Mind if I follow you? I got no where to go.” I asked jokingly
“Sure why not,” she replied with a small giggle. We began our walk through the school. We just talked the whole time. It was like we had know each other forever. We talked as if we could tell each other anything. Our first stop was her geometry teacher. She had to drop off her sports bag. Her teacher kept it in her classroom so Jada didn’t have to haul it around school all day.
Of course the evil math building was open but not the one I hang out in. We continued the walk to her leadership class which started before school started. When we got there, I said “See ya later,” and she went off to class. As I was heading back to see if the Spanish building was unlocked, I felt was strange. I no longer felt cold. I don’t know how I felt. It was as if I was in a perfect state. I was no longer so hating. I was joyful. I then realized, that the walk I had with Jada was really nice. It was a lot of fun. I don’t know. All we did was talk yet it was great. My cold feeling of resentment had turned into a warm happiness. I walked back to the Spanish building with a smile on my face. I now had a reason to get to school early.
the other part I wanted to add, is about him going through class and finally getting to his class with her. It goes on over about a month or so and they hang out more and stuff. Well at the end he is about to ask her out, but it doesn't say what happens. Should I add that or no.
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