Young Writers Society

i like this, it was different, and different is always better.

I notice how at school you failed to tell me that you too...had a protagonist named Jerry!

My apologizes ahahaha...

Then again Jerrry's your protagonist and my Jerry more of...well i guess a motif in my stroy...He's not the main character though...

It's very sarcastic and real. Something that I would expect to actually happen in real life. It's very sarcastic and fits very well with "life". This is what it says to me:

A boy who is blinded by society's image of beauty (hence the stick figure drawings with the girl who becomes fat from sadness meaning that she's ugly). But, when reality pulls him back, the reader realizes how close the boy is with "Molly" (also known as Elizabeth in real life). It feels like he's writing about falling in love with a girl who is popular but it's not because of who she is, but rather because he feels that he has to fall in love with her because she is "beautiful".

The real beauty lies is Molly even though he does not see it until he stops drawing.

I think that by calling Elizabeth by the character, Molly's name, it shows a certain compassion that he holds in his heart for her but doesn't yet see for himself until that moment.

I thought it was very good. Keep up the good work, sarcastic pen. <- that will be my name for you.

-local creation

Ok, I agree on all of the above ( I'm like that, sadly).Hillarious!

it's funny. i like it alot. it's something to read to make u laugh

Thanks, LC. I don't know if Jerry's into Elizabeth as much as you might think, but I like your comment on reality. Though, how it plays into this story I'm unsure. I stopped drawing stick figures way back in first grade, and I'm pretty sure I'll have much more to do in my spare time than write stick figure stories.

And I think I can crank out one more version, though I doubt it will be as funny. For one thing, the characters won't be as stupid (how advanced can Jerry be if he draws what must have been books for cavemen, anyway?).

Have a good one.

Very creative...strange, but in a good way. I don't have much to say except that it did seem to switch points of view, but I think that may have just been me. Oh, well...good job!

I thought that that was pretty good.