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Sunbathing in a parking lot



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Hijinks says...



Sunbathing in a parking lot

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'21—these scattered lines might make a map
'22—somewhere, folded in under the horizon
'23—If spacecrafts meet

Index of poems
1. Tuesday night
2. the second half
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When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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EllieMae says...



Spoiler! :
This looks awesome! I cant wait to see what you write. I will be back to see your awesome poems! :D
”Life can only be understood backward, but it must be lived forwards (so you might as well do Duolingo ).”


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alliyah says...



I am so happy to see you here.

Also this title has so much awesome wonderful poetry potential. I'm here for it! *subscribes immediately*
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
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AmayaStatham says...



Have fun writing, I love the theme you're going with.
  





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Tuesday night

tonight has been a sweaty rehearsal that ran past 10:00 pm,
a dinner of unheated pizza crusts at 11:13 on a Tuesday,
a pair of eyes squinting at a laptop screen—glasses lay unused on the desk,
and a shower postponed to tomorrow morning
in the squeezed time between extracting myself from my sheets
and being seven minutes late to my calculus tutorial—
because tonight is dedicated to sticky feelings:
heat, heavy limbs, oily hair, acne on shoulders,
and fatigue that runs as deep as the heels of my feet
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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Ventomology says...



Spoiler! :
Idk if you meant to do this or not... but there are so many 's' sounds in this poem and it really makes the whole thing sound very cohesive out loud.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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the second half

I am not a party-goer—

the conversations always vibrate so loudly that sometimes you can be convinced the windows are about to erupt,
and heat radiates off skin until the air blurs
the same way the air above an asphalt road in the summer does.
there is music playing but it has lost the melody and the lyrics;
it is a mess of hoarse voices, worn-off deodorant, and stomping feet.

but tonight I wait out the first half,
until the playlist is abandoned and the windows are propped open by hazardous stacks of pens and erasers,
and the curtains are gently swaying,
and everyone has thrown themselves onto the chapped leather couches.
by 2 a.m. I am caught up in it all: the way that limbs start to move more loosely,
gazes are held more intensely,
and suddenly you can feel the fibres that tie you to these people.
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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Spoiler! :
@Ventomology thank you!! I've noticed that I tend to use a lot of words with "s" sounds in them when I write poetry—not on purpose, it just often turns out that way. I guess I must subconsciously really like that sound? xD
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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(previously whatchamacallit and Seirre)
  








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