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The Long Drive



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Mon Mar 04, 2024 3:28 pm
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Well friends it's that time of year again. Also I'm moving! And there's a total solar eclipse! And the annual company meeting! I'm doing a lot of driving this April haha.

With everything going on I don't think 30 poems is on the table, so here's what we've got:
  • A Sonnet every Sunday
  • Finish lyrics and main melody for "Town out West," "Something Wrong," and one more song for Chao Mien Western project
  • Free song
  • A poem for the eclipse
  • A haiku each Wednesday
  • Free poem



Table of Contents:

Wednesday Haikus:
03 - April Snowstorm
10 - Eclipse Haiku
17 - Big Lightning
24 - Working Again

Sunday Sonnets:
07 - The Long Drive
14 - The Long Move
21 - The Long Adjustment
28 -

Eclipse Poem:
Cosmic Forces

Free Poem(s):
things I know how to say

Free Song Updates:
Groove Take 1
Intro/Outro Lyrics Take 1
Verse X Take 1
Full Lyrics


Chao Mien Western Progress Updates:
4/2 Update
Last edited by Ventomology on Thu Apr 25, 2024 3:58 am, edited 14 times in total.
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ooooh cool graphic!! really captures the hecticness of moving and travel. good luck with the move, and i'm super excited to see your poetry (and lyrics !!) this NaPo, Vento!! :D
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Fri Mar 08, 2024 8:19 pm
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@Spearmint I hope you're ready for more poor-quality voice recordings too haha.
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They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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cant wait to see what you do :3
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Warm-Up One | The Parking Lot

The Parking Lot is not a real place.
The Parking Lot can't hurt us.
The Parking Lot does not show up in any room list in my outlook calendar,
nor is it labeled on a map,
nor reservable by mini tablet by the door,

but God,
would that every meeting I didnt have to attend
would be there.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Warm-up Two | blues music in my red car

West-coast-best-coast swing:
slow and smooth, groovin' hard,
body-rolling in the driver's seat,
dreaming choreography until
I jerk the stearing wheel and veer-
jerk back to the street and veer-
and then, again, the chorus line repeats.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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I love this so far! Looks amazing and love your poetry :D
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Warm-up Three | Team Dinner

Does corporate know? Does corporate even care?
My boss said, "Get dessert, then get a spare."

*from my silly couplet Jam prompt
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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one time I managed to grab a couple sandwiches, a small bag of chips, a large bag of chips that took me a couple months to go through, and a couple cookies from a company party. on top of all the food I ate there ofc.
S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse
a persona che mai tornasse al mondo,
questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse.
Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo
non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero,
senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.

Inferno, Canto 27, l 61-66.
  





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@TheSilverFox our project exec took the team to an Italian restaurant in one of the Pretty Suburbs and got apps, dessert, and wine for us on top of the entrees.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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looool might as well have a five-course meal while you're at it!!! my company doesn't have Wine Money but my boss sometimes orders from this place that has fantastic muffalettas
S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse
a persona che mai tornasse al mondo,
questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse.
Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo
non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero,
senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.

Inferno, Canto 27, l 61-66.
  





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@Ventomology I love that Team Dinner couplet.
she/her

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Oehhh, the first one and the third one are my favourites already!!
  





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Warm-up Four | Package at Work

New work computer
Please work, computer
Clean QWERTY keyboard working perfectly computer

Reinstalling programs
Please don't stall, my programs
The brand-new CPU should handle every call and program

New work computer
Please work, computer
Hope you work for longer than my last work computer
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Wed Mar 27, 2024 4:36 pm
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i love this so much XD
"New work computer
Please work, computer"
is such a perfect use of two meanings of "work"!
also the reinstalling/stall, the rhymes with stall/call and new/CPU, and programs/program !! these poems are already so strong, Vento-- much hype for NaPo!! :3
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