I'm new to poetry, in fact I wrote my first today!(01-04-2020)
#1 - DANCING
#2 - SEAMAN
Last edited by CqpM8012 on Fri Apr 03, 2020 10:13 am, edited 4 times in total.
Medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits, and necessary to sustain life But poetry, beauty, romance, love these are what we stay alive for - Dead poets society
I see her dancing, every night in my dreams like a slim silhouette floating under the moon She performed across the globe, her blue eyes twinkling under bright lights She moved flawlessly, as if to paint with her legs She never heard the claps, as she danced in her own world Soon her perfect body lines faded, as she aged and aged but in my dreams, she still dances like she was born to
Medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits, and necessary to sustain life But poetry, beauty, romance, love these are what we stay alive for - Dead poets society
Thanks a lot for your support guys!! It means a lot
Medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits, and necessary to sustain life But poetry, beauty, romance, love these are what we stay alive for - Dead poets society
As a boy, he wondered 'what lies across the great sea?' 'The Devil' said the father, To keep him safe on the land He knew he would find out soon for now he's just staring at the perfect line where the, blue of sky meets the blue of water
He built a ship one day, 'SAILOR' he named it, perhaps on behalf of his own dream He drifted across various waters the calm ones, the still ones the ferocious ones, the mighty ones
He never got tired, always searching for better The waters never let him down, always leading to a new land But he always liked to be that speck of dust, surrounded by vast blueness For he was a different person, when he was at sea A more kinder one, A more jolly one 'Perhaps its best for humanity if each does what they truly loved'
He faced many storms, both within and outside himself yet he always stood tall like the cliff on the shore Every storm has an end, followed by bright sunshine But the storm he faced that night, says otherwise He knew the sea is calling, He smiled like never before He never felt more loved, and cared for in his life Embracing the waves, he was finally united, with the love of his life.
Medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits, and necessary to sustain life But poetry, beauty, romance, love these are what we stay alive for - Dead poets society
Commenting on your first one first: there's some really great imagery! Personally, I feel like 'dancing' and 'women's are a little cliche, so obviously and so often paired together in poetry, but it's alright - I like cliches!
I think my favorite part of the second one is this:
'what lies across the great sea?' 'The Devil' said the father, To keep him safe on the land
This is sooo relatable. like. so much. parents exaggerating on danger because they don't want you to leave or grow up - so. accurate. I also really like the sea, and water in general - so this poem is extra special pour moi
I was eleven years old and I'd lost my mother, and my soul. And the crucible gave me you.
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