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Fri Apr 17, 2020 2:26 am
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mckaylaam says...



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You're doing great Jay, keep it up!

I really like when you wrote this in "part i: about time":
"when i sit, think, and
try to remember
the significance of
a wednesday
or being halfway through
another month,
i can’t find it.

and then this part in "part ii: agenda":
"my planner
lays abandoned
on my shelf
atop all of my other
nonessential supplies."

It makes me wish for everything to be normal again, so I can go back to regularly using my planner and actually remembering what day it is.
And I love the thought of being with you,
or maybe it's the thought of not being so alone.


  





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Fri Apr 17, 2020 8:35 pm
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I'm glad you liked my poems. <3
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Fri Apr 17, 2020 8:35 pm
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april 17th, 2020: apathy

staring out the window
at the gray sky above,
you wonder why
nothing hurts.

you keep trying
to motivate yourself.
to get off of your bed.
to take off
your black and red robe.
to do something
other than scrolling
aimlessly through yet
another webcomic.

but no matter what
you try,
the clouds outside
won’t move.
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Fri Apr 17, 2020 8:57 pm
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I came up with that line on the fly so I'm very happy that you commented on it.
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Sat Apr 18, 2020 9:15 pm
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Magebird says...



april 18th, 2020: theatrics

my story
began on a stage
when my mom
thrust a stake into
my dad’s heart.

now i stand
on a stage of my own,
looking into
an empty audience
and bowing alone
during curtain call.
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Sat Apr 18, 2020 11:13 pm
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mckaylaam says...



Spoiler! :
April 17th - This is the poem that actually inspired the poem I wrote today! I really liked it and felt that it added to the inspiration I was already feeling from the weather outside today

April 18th - I really enjoyed reading this poem and seeing how my writing was able to inspire your own! I love the imagery here, especially the first stanza.

Good job on making it this far in NaPo - I can't wait to see the read of your poems this month! :)
And I love the thought of being with you,
or maybe it's the thought of not being so alone.


  





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Sun Apr 19, 2020 9:19 pm
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Magebird says...



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Thank you so much! I've read your latest poems, but I still need to swing by your thread to comment on them - I can say the same about yours that you said about mine. <3
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Sun Apr 19, 2020 9:20 pm
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april 19th, 2020: our lair

when the year was still new,
my mom and i drove
to a little bookstore
in a town i can’t remember
the name of.

we collected books like
a dragon hoards its treasure--
a prize one day,
forgotten the next.

then there was an avalanche
on the mountainside.
rocks tumbled down
and kept us trapped in.
we turned to our treasure
when we realized
the little bit of sunlight
streaming through the holes
in the blockade
wasn’t enough to quench
our thirst.

but my treasure makes
an empty feeling set
in the center of my heart.
in a world where i only
catch glimpses of the sky
i can’t help but focus
on the smudges and rust
on the metal that
no long shine.
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Sun Apr 19, 2020 10:22 pm
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Aaaaaaa "Our Lair" is amazing! I thoroughly enjoyed it, from start to finish! I have read a lot of quarantine poems, but I think this one is one of my favorites! Keep on being awesome! ~Lucy
  





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Sun Apr 19, 2020 11:46 pm
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Thanks @LZPianoGirl! I really enjoyed writing it, so I'm glad you liked it!
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Mon Apr 20, 2020 2:53 pm
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kattee says...



I've been trying to write quarantine-inspired poems, but I just couldn't. I mean, I did write a poem about the virus itself but not what I felt about staying at home, isolated from the world. Your latest poem really inspired me to write one!

I also love how you described the virus as an avalanche. It is on point! This virus spread too fast and the next thing we know, hundreds of thousands of people are already infected!
If you want some sweet reviews to your poems, short stories, and essays, come by Katteelog.

Have a lovely day❤️
  





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Mon Apr 20, 2020 7:41 pm
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I'm glad I could inspire you, @Katteex! And thanks for the compliment. :)
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Mon Apr 20, 2020 7:47 pm
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april 20th, 2020: anxiety

anxiety is like
watching grains of sand
slipping through the hourglass.

i have so much to do
before the top becomes
the bottom
and the bottom
becomes the top.
but i keep counting
each little rough
white speck.

and when i start
losing count
i think that smashing
the glass
will make the
overwhelming emotions
shatter, too.

but all it does
is make the sand
go spilling
all over my clothes.
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Tue Apr 21, 2020 2:08 am
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kattee says...



I love this line in your latest poem!

and when i start
losing count
i think that smashing
the glass
will make the
overwhelming emotions
shatter, too.


And is it just me or the poem is somehow shaped like a hourglass sliced in half? That's really creative !!
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Patience is the strength of the weak, impatience is the weakness of the strong.
— Immanuel Kant, Philosopher