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Rhia's Rhymes



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Tue Apr 01, 2014 10:17 pm
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Been doing this awhile (poetry is the only contribution I've made to YWS), but making myself do it daily will surely be beneficial.
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Tue Apr 01, 2014 10:18 pm
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1/30

Paired
Image
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Thu Apr 03, 2014 6:55 pm
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2/30
Steeled

Your hands cup mine as
the water pools over, dangerously warm,
a trickle onto the stainless steel.


It reminds me of you, that
steely countenance, holding firmly on
until I break down and puddle,


always in your arms,
I fall apart nowhere else.
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Thu Apr 03, 2014 6:57 pm
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3/30

White petals furl and wither
on oil-spill dark asphalt.
It is Florida, after all
and the closest we get to snow is that early spring froth
that bubbles, white and creamy, after a storm.
petals knocked free from Dogwoods and ornamental pears,
our closest thing to snow Is somewhere between
life and death;
blooms torn down from their home
with an in-like-a-lion storm.
Beautiful before browning and
becoming the earth again
those suds
disappear as rapid as they spring forth
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
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Sat Apr 05, 2014 11:15 am
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4/30

guys, it rhymes. It's a terrible rhyme scheme, but it rhymes.

Lucky Cats

China, glazed
China-made china
cat gaze-
paw raised

Jaded green,
cream,
lavender dream
all three
grin back at me

wish for luck,
kiss for luck
rub their little
paws for luck
china cats look
vacant, get stuck

staring up at you
nothing else to do
not what they're used to
it all started anew
from their point of view
and now its true-
they wish no luck onto you
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Sun Apr 06, 2014 1:57 pm
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5/30
It's like a door
closed, but glowing and back-lit,
whispers and beckons with
a sensuous sort of stirring emotion.
The tiles call out, there's nothing,
but my feet still patter onwards
to some secret which pulsates
electric and fierce as
I stride into the conception
of darkness itself.

There's so much more potential in
a closed door than one wide open.
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Sun Apr 06, 2014 2:09 pm
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6/30

Azaleas blaze forth,
suddenly
in realization of the
majestic import they hold.
I don't remember signs
of anything in between- no
clutched buds fretful of tomorrow
just nothing
followed by the tumultuous everything
reminiscent of the knowledge
that one day I'll see
something beautiful in a mirror
after so many thousands
of empty reflections.
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Sun Apr 06, 2014 4:34 pm
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7/30

Astronomy
Stuccoed walls with loud interjections-
orange and green, heady
as the laughing bubble of latin music.
To struggle against the mocking promises
flushed red crescent moons
weeping glowing,
always tearing outwards
to join the onslaught.
They rise with the pull
of nails passing over skin
and never set.
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Sun Apr 06, 2014 4:59 pm
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8/30

Ineffable
His fingers wrap about my wrist,
tips my hand until it spills across the table to him,
diaphenous skin chalked up blue with veins,
darkening against his inexorable fingers.
Slow, almost tenderly sliding away
to uncover the paper my hand perched upon.
His fingers rest right at the juncture,
above the thrumming of my being
and I hope that he can't hear
how my body hums and buzzes
for a continuation of that nearness,
hope he can't feel the song that bubbles
further and higher before escaping
between my lips aloft a sigh.
Then the touch is gone all too quick yet
not quite soon enough.
Last edited by rhiasofia on Thu Apr 10, 2014 9:22 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Tue Apr 08, 2014 9:41 pm
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Rhia! All of these poems, I can pluck out a line or two and just melt it in it. Here are just a few of my thoughts:

Paired - Loving the pair-of-lines form, I especially like how normally when we see pairs of lines we think couplets, but I like the choice you made here in indenting it because it sort of strikes me like: This is different from a couplet. Seriously, it's difficult to get me drooling on choice of frame XD

Steeled - Awww. That last line <3 So warm and cute despite the "coldness" that steel sort of evokes.

White petals - beautiful imagery here, and voice!

Closed Door- pooh I love this one, its got an interesting premise behind it:more potential in a closed door than one wide open, and I love how you leave it open ended and allow the reader to think upon the meaning of it.

Keep it going! <3
  





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Tue Apr 08, 2014 10:09 pm
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Thanks so much Audy! It's great to hear your encouragement.

Ohmygosh, you're the first one to say anything about the fact that it's called Paired and is in lines of two! That makes me so happy, I actually thought about the structure and didn't get any reaction until now. Yay!
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Thu Apr 10, 2014 9:23 pm
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9/30

Old Films

Show me I'm more
than just
an enigma; show me
some sweet chaous to
the ticking of me,
roll the gears,
play me out of context with
your own mysteries.
Show me what
to love about
bombardment of skin
to skin without chagrin.
Map out holistic motions across
my skin's atlas, so I might
remember how you move
and contrive the same reel
to spin onwards,
flicker crepuscular memories
over quiet movie screens
when you're gone.
Show me once more, beckon
before I forget, or
worse still, linger only
at the penumbra of your being
shadow-cast, alone
to watch you darken,
be forgotten.
Remind me, once more.
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Sat Apr 12, 2014 8:55 pm
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10/30

--No matter how hard I try
to convince myself, the world
-hasn't stopped turning
-
--It refuses
-------to give up its message; look-
the Chickadees play, they know
------that they are your favorite.
-------It's just for you that
-----------------------------they swirl
-----------------------------------------into
-----------your self-imposed
----------------------silence,
---------------diffusing their
-----childish laughter
like honey into vinegar;
they sweeten the bitterness
-
look-
-a dandelion bobs
-as the wind turns about but
----------it doesn't want to fluff
its feathers out yet
it waits for you, nodding
--and calling,
-------make a wish just
-------wish it all away
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Sun Apr 13, 2014 12:07 am
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11/30

White-washed walls and
berber carpet offer
no repeals to my pleas.

I have become just a
tearstain on the world.
I have nothing more to be.
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Sun Apr 13, 2014 12:14 am
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12/30

you gave me up first, but
perhaps I accepted it too soon.
Red-rimmed eyes replay
memories of us before
single-handedly turning this tub
into a brackish body of water
which you just sailed right out of.
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  








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