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Tue Nov 03, 2009 7:27 pm
Demeter says...



Both done!
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Wed Nov 04, 2009 5:55 pm
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Its a poem on career choice confusion.
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Wed Nov 04, 2009 6:45 pm
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Done!
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Sun Nov 29, 2009 2:02 pm
MissMiaFacinelli says...



Hey Dems!

Could you possibly review this for me? It's a short-ish piece of Narrative Poetry - I hope you like it!

Battlefields Eulogy

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Mon Nov 30, 2009 4:48 am
Rascalover says...



Romantic fiction: Let Me Love You

this is chapter 12

Brief description of what has happened before: Isabella was in a car accident a few days later her boyfriend whose in a band breaks up with her. Jay, the boyfriend, has a cousin named Gary and that how Isabella met Jay. He is also in the band. He consoles Isabella cause theyre best friends and they slowly fall in love. He treats her to a weekend get away and gives her a promise ring to always love her. But now shes pregnant and she doesnt know what to do. whether to tell him or not.

link: topic54963.html

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Tiffany
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Tue Dec 08, 2009 6:32 pm
Demeter says...



Done.
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Thu Dec 31, 2009 8:54 pm
Jasmine Hart says...



I'd love one on this very short story in "other fiction" if you get a chance;
viewtopic.php?t=55949.

Also if you have any poetry you'd like critiqued I'd be more than happy to return the favour.

Jas
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Sat Jan 02, 2010 12:55 pm
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Done. :)
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Sat Jan 02, 2010 1:09 pm
OxfordandOnyx says...



If you don't mind, I'd like to know what you think of my poem 'Find me'. It's posted in Dramatic Poetry.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic56319.html

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Sun Jan 03, 2010 4:44 pm
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Done!
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Tue Jan 12, 2010 5:06 pm
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I want more!
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Sun Jan 17, 2010 9:59 pm
pudin.junidf says...



Hey Demi!!

Do you think you can review this please?
Is called a demon sits behind me at school.

Thanks so much.
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Wed Jan 20, 2010 4:33 am
Jas says...



Hi, would you mind reviewing this?

Ignorance is Never Bliss: Prologue

No kind words, no harsh words, just honest truth.

Thanks! :)


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I am nothing
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or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Wed Jan 20, 2010 7:40 pm
BenFranks says...



Hullo Dem!

Would you do me the honour of reviewing an extract from my Non-fiction column-based book?
I'd like to know if you enjoyed the humour of it! :D
Anyway here's the link: (I have two extracts, I don't mind if you review either one or both! :D)
topic57357.html "It's a Disaster."
topic57293.html "The Problem With It is."
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Fri Jan 22, 2010 2:12 am
Kale says...



Hey, Dems. I see you do lyrics, so if you would review this unloved piece of mine (Fate (An Interpretation into English)), I would be most appreciative.
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