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Mon Mar 24, 2008 4:27 pm
Azila says...



Hullo, all!

At popular Skins's demand, I'm re-vamping this thread. You probably know the drill: if you want a critique, tell me so here -- just make sure to post the link, so I can find it.

Some things about my reviews:
1. I especially like to review Other Fiction, Fantasy Fiction, Historical Fiction, and Science Fiction. I will critique other things too (including Art & Photography) but I might not feel as comfortable with it.
2. I don't generally do poetry, and my reason why is nicely summarized by this Bob Dylan quote: "Don't criticize what you can't understand." However, if you really want me to look at your poem I'll do my best.
3. Please don't give me anything rated 18+ unless the content isn't too explicit.
4. I don't want to review novels unless it's the first chapter/prologue. I really don't want to review "chapter 35, part 8 out of eleven."
5. Here are a few examples of my critiques: Can You See Me?, The Unicorn.

By the way, I'm not going to reply to this after each review anymore. If I've already gotten to a request then I'll "Like" that comment.

Also, I give very in-depth reviews that generally take me about an hour to write (from the time I start reading) so if I have a lot of critiques lined up you may have to wait a bit, but I will try to get back to you within a day. Warning: I can be harsh.
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Mon Mar 24, 2008 11:10 pm
Autumn says...



heya I'd appreciate a critique of this =] :

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Mon Mar 24, 2008 11:45 pm
Soul of the Phantom says...



This is rated PG-13.

It's an series of stories, but they stand apart alone mainly, so you don't need to read the others to understand what is going on. It is also in 'Fantasy Fiction'

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Thu Apr 17, 2008 1:39 am
Azila says...



I only need less than twenty more crits in order to get another star!

...so, who wants a review? They're free.

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Thu Apr 17, 2008 2:08 am
JFW1415 says...



I'd love one on my new story! It's three parts, and here are the two I have up:

Part One: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html

Part Two: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28953.html

Do whatever you can! Thanks a million! (And let me know if you want one in my 'want a critique?' thread! I need another star, too.)

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Thu Apr 17, 2008 2:30 am
chocoholic says...



Will you critique what I have of The Gate of Glendon, my new novel? The prologue and first four chapters and sitting in my portfolio, just wishing they could be ripped to pieces by critiquers.
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Thu Apr 17, 2008 9:56 pm
Talking_Pinata says...



So sorry, but I've gotten to the point where I depend upon you for reviews! DX! So here's chapter one of "Yarn". You so graciously reviewed the prologue, and it'd help a ton for a review on this one! Please? THANKYOU!

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Sat Apr 19, 2008 4:13 am
lsilvernail says...



Hey, I'd appreciate a critique of my story:
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Could you also tell a couple of other people about it maybe? I haven't gotten any critiques yet! Thanks!
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Wed Apr 23, 2008 3:23 am
JFW1415 says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html

There are three parts, and it's due soon. Can you look at them quickly/relook at them? (I can't remember if you read it before I edited...)

Thanks!

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Fri May 30, 2008 6:49 pm
Emerson says...



Hello!


I thought I would ask something in return...? It's in the romance section, hope that is alright? I don't neccessarily need a critique on the first part, but the others are neglected of love, but you would have to read the first part to understand the other parts. @_@ So I will just link you to the first part.

God Still Loves You (1)


I will say that I have part three rated as R but only for some adult language so if you don't feel comfortable with that, I understand, and you don't have to look at it at all. ^_^


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Thu Jun 05, 2008 9:40 pm
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Hi! You and your reviews are so awesome-possum! ^_^ If you could maybe...?

The Dragon, the dog, and the Dove.

It's classified in Action/Adventure, but I debated whether to put it in Other anyway. Hopefully it's alright. ^^ If you don't think you can help, though, don't worry about it. :)

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Fri Jun 06, 2008 5:43 am
RandomGrrl says...



Hey! I would really love feedback on "Intuition" if you get a chance. It's a story separated into five sections... If you do look at it, bear in mind that it's meant to be read in one go. Thanks!

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Fri Jun 06, 2008 5:44 am
RandomGrrl says...



Oh, I should also mention, that though it isn't rated on there it IS somewhat freaky... maybe PG-13 if you're being conservative. So, if you don't want to look at it, totally understandable. :D





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Wed Jul 09, 2008 7:14 pm
Jon says...



in my portfolio under Canaby Witches chapters 0ne - Five
i would really appreciate it! :D
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Sun Jul 13, 2008 5:38 am
BigBadBear says...



Night Terrors

I have just posted this and wondered if I could get some reviews?
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Would love help on this.








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