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Tue Oct 01, 2019 1:09 am
Fishr says...



Hi Biscuit! Could you please review my second half in the green room? I could really use a second pair of eyes with character development and how the story flows in terms of making sense.

British Love, Boston Affection (part II) (Rated R)

Thank you!
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