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Tue Oct 01, 2019 1:09 am
Fishr says...



Hi Biscuit! Could you please review my second half in the green room? I could really use a second pair of eyes with character development and how the story flows in terms of making sense.

British Love, Boston Affection (part II) (Rated R)

Thank you!
The sadness drains through me rather than skating over my skin. It travels through every cell to reach the ground. I filter it yet strangely enough, I keep what was pure and it is the dirt that leaves.
  








As a former (and rather excellent) liar herself, Aru knew that, sometimes, speaking the truth felt like wrenching a thorn out of your side. But doing the opposite meant pretending it wasn't there. And that made every single step ache. It was no way to live.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Nectar of Immortality