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Reviews: 365
Tue Oct 01, 2019 1:09 am
Fishr says...



Hi Biscuit! Could you please review my second half in the green room? I could really use a second pair of eyes with character development and how the story flows in terms of making sense.

British Love, Boston Affection (part II) (Rated R)

Thank you!
The sadness drains through me rather than skating over my skin. It travels through every cell to reach the ground. I filter it yet strangely enough, I keep what was pure and it is the dirt that leaves.
  








cron
have u ever noticed how ugly rosy-lipped batfish r? and not like in the “aw ur so ugly ur cute” way that like opossums r — no they’re just hideously ugly beasts that should never have existed and r the epitome of evolution fails. the stupidity, blank look, head emptiness. they’re horrible n everyone who likes them r horrible too. they truly have the worst fan-base >:[
— Shady