Young Writers Society

Night dawns,
Little is found but silence,
Broken only by the gentle snores.

Curtains are drawn, candles left half burnt
Wheels come to a halt, shadows disappear into deeper darkness still.

Yet I lay,
awaken,
to the sound of music in my memory.



This is my first ever time writing please dont go too harsh~ @>_<@ Much appreciated, thank you~ ^ ^

awaken shoud be awakened with a 'd.' Other than that, there weren't any grammatical mistakes and the poem had a nice flow, so good job with that! I'm not sure what my opinion is about the last line; it's kind of just there, I don't feel it completely fits with the rest of the poem, though that's my opinion and there's a good chance I'm wrong; I'm sure I've been wrong before. Hope this helped, sorry I didn't have any real critics for you.