Things Found in Ditches
1. A frog splashing into cold, dirty water to find his dinner of squirming insects.
2. Tiny, pale fish swimming through fuzzy green algae and using their streamlined bodies to dodge in and out of tendrils.
3. Mosquito larvae sitting still and growing inside their cases, abiding until it's time to hatch and soar.
4. Beer cans tossed by someone too bothered to enjoy life in a ditch.
5. Broken glass from unknown sources, maybe broken by drunks or flung from a wreck.
6. Tiny yellow wildflowers braving thick grass to find their own ray of sunshine.
7. A pair of dragonflies lustily hovering around each other like rope-less trapeze artists.
8. Rotting fish spilling from a discarded cooler that fills the air with salt and carbon.
9. A dead body stuffed in a garbage bag and left to spend a few days visiting frogs, fish, and dragonflies until someone finds him.
Something feels off to me. I think I used too many descriptive words or "ing" sounds. Help with fixing this? Besides that, I'm still new to writing, so please please please point out anything I missed!
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