Young Writers Society

This verbal portrait
You've painted with soft words.
I can see it right in front of me.
The smell of her silk washed hair
reaches my nose.
And her innocent laughter
fills my ears.

That's why you're called
A true writer.

Simply wonderful!

I love the way it sounds so... real!

Keep Writing,
~FW~

This is awesome! I felt that way about some pieces before. Like how you can see it play out sometimes like a movie, or if your really there. A bystander, or the character falling in love. Its a magical thing.

My favorite line:

This verbal portrait

Brilliant! Keep writing! You've a nack for it!

I love it! It's so simple, yet so descriptive and perfect. Plus, being a writer and all, this makes me feel awesome XD
The ending is my favorite. It wraps it all up nicely. I am a huge fan of short poems and this was awesome. I apologize for the meaningless review but I really have nothing else to say! I love it!
Keep up the great work!

~Ktg

P.S. I love your signature

Wonderful!
This poem flows so well, and you get an A+ for imagery!

This verbal portrait
You've painted with soft words. This line got me hooked
I can see it right in front of me. Maybe replace "see" with something more elaborate, because it seems a too simple word for this poem
The smell of her silk-washed hair <3
reaches my nose.
And her innocent laughter
fills my ears.

That's why you're called
A true writer.

Not many nitpicks at all. Great job!

Hey qaralynn!

One of the things that I noticed here was... well... how flat everything is. If you want to talk about a true writer, why not talk about the writing and the writer himself? Or maybe him making you see things a different way? Or something along those lines? Right now, you have the visual, auditory, and olfactory senses here, which is good, but you just briefly touch them in order so that you can get to your punchline... that this person is a true writer. But, wouldn't it be much better if you told this person that he was a true writer for opening up a whole new world that you never even knew existed until you saw his words? Wouldn't it be a much greater compliment for the writer if you told him that the reason why he was a true writer because he made you things that nobody before had made you feel before at an intensity that made your stomach flip? That sort of thing.

So, I think what you want to do is to make the compliments more specific and complimentary. That way, everything will be so much better and we'll get a taste as to who this true writer really is. Just think of some of the compliments that you would like to get for your own writing and stick them in... that will make it more realistic.

I only have one complaint, I feel it's to flat. I wish you would use a bit more Imagery. But overall, it's really good!!!

This verbal portrait
You've painted with soft words.comma
I can see it right in front of me.
The smell of her silk washed hair
reaches my nose. comma
And her innocent laughter
fills my ears.-

That's why you're called
A true writer.

Besides punctuation this is hard to critique. It's a little plain and not terribly inspiring but it's cute and relate-able.
-KatTrain

Hi, I like this poem, is simple and descriptive

Yup, one of my favorites from you!

This was a good start, but I also felt that it was lacking something.

This verbal portrait
You've painted with soft words.
I can see it right in front of me.
The smell of her silk washed hair
reaches my nose.
And her innocent laughter
fills my ears.

That's why you're called
A true writer.

In the first two lines, I felt like you did have something going there, but it didn't get any better. It kind of just stayed at the same medium level of interest and never peaked. The opening and closing lines were good, but I would suggest expanding and broadening the lines inbetween.
Also, in the fourth line, I just felt like silk was the wrong word to use. Or, maybe I could almost see where you were trying to go with it, but then I would suggest saying something like "silky hair," not silk-washed. I have no idea why, but I thought of corn silk for some reason, and that didn't give me a very good image.
So, try expanding, and, most importantly, keep writing!