Young Writers Society

Poem Version:

I didn't want to upset you, dear,
Though you say you are just fine.
Everything between us seems to be clear,
But I can feel something is just out of line.

But no, I don't want you to worry,
I'm worried enough by myself.
I don't want to lose you, I don't want this story
To go over and over itself.

What will I do when there's no more 'us'?
When my world turns into ruins at last?
If I need a shoulder, will you be there?
Why can't you hold me tight, when life isn't fair?

Baby, I need you more than I thought,
More than ever, more than ever before.
Baby, come back, I want you here,
It feels like the end's coming real near.

And when you're gone, I wonder
Who's gonna save me from going under.
Who's going to be there for me?
My shoulder to cry on, when I'm in need?

Even if it's meant to fall apart
We will never know, not until we try.
Painful loneliness lurks deep in my heart.
Will you be the one to silence down my cries?


Song Version

[spoken]
(I didn't want to upset you, dear,
Though you say you are just fine.
Everything between us seems to be clear,
But I can feel something is just out of line.)

I.
And when you're gone, I wonder
Who's gonna save me from going under.
Who's going to be there for me?
My shoulder to cry on, when I'm in need?

[bridge I]
What will I do, when there's no more 'us'?
When my world turns into ruins at last?

[chorus]
Baby, I need you more than I thought,
More than ever, more than ever before.
Baby, come back, I want you here,
'Cause it feels like the end is coming real near.

II.
But no, I don't want you to worry,
I'm worried enough by myself.
I don't want to hurt you, I don't want this story
To go over and over itself.

[bridge II]
If I need a shoulder, will you be there?
Why can't you hold me tight, when life isn't fair?

[chorus]
Baby, I need you more than I thought,
More than ever, more than ever before.
Baby, come back, I want you here,
'Cause it feels that my heart is devoured by fear.

III.
Even if it's meant
To fall apart,
We will never know,
Not until we try.
Painful loneliness
Lurks deep in my heart.
Will you be the one
To silence down my cries?
Will you be the one
To answer all my whys?

[chorus]
Baby, I need you more than I thought,
More than ever, more than ever before.
Baby, come back, I want you here,
'Cause it feels like I'm choking, swallowing my tears.
'Cause my body's so lonely in this endless sphere
And I need a shoulder, so come back, my dear.

IT seems really to be a rather nice poem. I also liked the song version of the poem. Looks like you are really serious about this person.
But no, I don't want you to worry,
I'm worried enough by myself.
I don't want to lose you, I don't want this story
To go over and over itself.

In this stanza of the poem, the lines could have been more poetic like:
But no, I don't want you to worry,
I'm worried enough myself.
I don't want to lose you, I don't want this story
To go on over and over itself.

But, in the line"I'm worried enough by myself." , Are you worrying enough yourself or are you worried about yourself or is it, are you worried?? I was confused after reading that stanza. Other than that everything was alright and the lyrics was great!!

IT seems really to be a rather nice poem. I also liked the song version of the poem. Looks like you are really serious about this person.
But no, I don't want you to worry,
I'm worried enough by myself.
I don't want to lose you, I don't want this story
To go over and over itself.

In this stanza of the poem, the lines could have been more poetic like:
But no, I don't want you to worry,
I'm worried enough myself.
I don't want to lose you, I don't want this story
To go on over and over itself.

But, in the line"I'm worried enough by myself." , Are you worrying enough yourself or are you worried about yourself or is it, are you worried?? I was confused after reading that stanza. Other than that everything was alright and the lyrics was great!!