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A Letter



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Thu Oct 13, 2011 1:51 am
StoryWeaver13 says...



Spoiler! :
So basically I was trying to write this through talking to the actual letter as though it was a person, then later pulling away to look at it as a letter and referring to the actual person who wrote it. Sorry if it's confusing.




A Letter


Dearest friend, so paper-bound,
With words to lend, said without sound,
Elaborate now, for I cannot ask
The why or how, oh such a task,
But be thankful my patience is sincere,
For truly, I’m grateful for having you near.

Your skin is so slick, at the tips of my fingers,
Oh the longing is sick, but my smile still lingers.
These emotions I feel, oh I know they’re taboos,
But from your skin I read real black-lettered tattoos,
And with these things all said, well I cannot respond;
My words remain earthbound, too shy to move on.

My timid thoughts work in shadows, they flicker so fast,
My mind hung on the gallows, forgotten my past,
And yet sweet words I remember, chilling your curse,
As it’s nearing December, and the longing grows worse.
And what petty cliché; truly this, Love, is low,
But in a way, the truth’s all that we'll ever know.

So you restate your words, as I read them again,
The distance absurd, with you here in my hand,
But I must say goodbye, you know it is true,
For we can’t tell a lie, it‘s simply not what we do,
And so I must begin the end, and answer you clearly,
“Goodbye, dearest friend,” I write back, “I love you, sincerely.”
  





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Thu Oct 13, 2011 2:48 am
SlyNightOwl says...



Wow, lately I've been reading a lot of poems. I guess I just can't get enough. Your poem is so sweet and made me want to cry. C’:
Sometimes when I read a piece that really moves me I always think, "I'll never find anything better than this right here." I thought that a couple hours ago about another poem I read on another site, and now I have found yours and feel like that again. <3 Ah, writing. I love what you've posted here; it’s great.
Rah, rah, ree, kick em' in the knee. Rah, rah, rass, em' in the... OTHER KNEE!
  





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Thu Oct 13, 2011 2:49 am
briggsy1996 says...



Hi there,
This is very confusing, subject wise, I have to admit. But my oh my, it's so beautifully written! Your rhyming scheme doesn't waver at all- you didn't miss a beat. What I liked most was how it cleverly wove together into this amazing (yet confusing) poem.
I don't think it needs to make sense though, because I find that sometimes just reading something that sounds poetic and flows like this does is enough to satisfy the reader. Like I said, the message wasn't crystal clear, but I got the overall gist of it, and the writing and descriptions and it's overall flow made up for what it lacked.
Thanks for the read, and happy writing :)
-Briggsy
but the sky is love and i am for you
just so long and long enough
-E.E. Cummings
  








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