Seven PM haiku

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Lucifer
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Mon Nov 28, 2005 8:38 pm
Lucifer says... · Mon Nov 28, 2005 8:38 pm
the clock chimes seven
I sense my impending doom
then my date drives up
Holding pasts in ash black earth
Bound by roots
Roots into sand
Grow towards the giver
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Elizabeth
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Tue Nov 29, 2005 12:45 am
Elizabeth says... · Tue Nov 29, 2005 12:45 am
AHAHA
I'm sorry that was kinda funny though.
Honestly, it was funny, short, simple, just like a haiku should be.
I liked it... Nothing I could help with without turning it against it's haiku self... Nice :)
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A person is more than their experiences, stacked up like stones... Our best moments are the foundations we use to reach for the sky.
— Yumi and the Nightmare Painter by Brandon Sanderson