The Rebel Kings

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iiRawrDinosaurii
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Sat Jun 25, 2011 1:11 am
iiRawrDinosaurii says... · Sat Jun 25, 2011 1:11 am
Kings of Rebel.
Kings of Rebel.

Quiet around the new,
Talkative around the old.

A two in one deal,
That people don’t get.

I understand
The Rebel Kings.

One on the outside,
Two on the inside.

Nice and kind,
But brutal and deadly.

I met the Rebel Kings,
And never trusted so fast.

He doesn’t just listen,
He provides care and advice.

A two in one deal,
That people don’t get.

One on the outside,
Two on the inside.

Kings of Rebel.
Kings of Rebel.
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Daisuki
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Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:04 am
Daisuki says... · Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:04 am
I really liked this. I thought the title was catchy and the rhythm was fresh, fun to read. My favorite line was:
I met the Rebel Kings,
And never trusted so fast.


I love the way that line sounds.

So, it sounds like this person has a split personality. But maybe you're comparing how he acts around different people? Anyways, I liked this poem a lot.

-Dai
Oh, I wish I was punk-rocker with flowers in my hair.
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iiRawrDinosaurii
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Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:13 am
iiRawrDinosaurii says... · Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:13 am
So, it sounds like this person has a split personality.


I'm glad you understood the concept of what I was trying to get at.
And yes,
my best friend does have Split Personality Disorder. (:


I'm glad you liked it.
I personally didn't like it at first, but I gave it to my friend anyways.
And he loved it.
So I've been putting it out there to see what other people think of it. ^_^
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Daisuki
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Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:15 am
Daisuki says... · Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:15 am
Oh wow, he does have a split personality? Knowing that really gives the poem a lot more meaning and background. I really did enjoy this poem, and your friend is very lucky to have you!
-Dai
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iiRawrDinosaurii
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Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:23 am
iiRawrDinosaurii says... · Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:23 am
Yeah. (:
I figured it wouldn't have as much of a meaning to everyone else as it would to him. (:
And he helps me out through everything,
so I help him out through everything. (:
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Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:23 pm
tgirly says... · Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:23 pm
I like it, but at first I wasn't show how to read it. But that it probably me just being stupid :P I really liked it, and knowing that you do have a friend with a split personality makes it all the more meaningful (like Daisuki said.) Good job.
-tgirly
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