Haiku, anyone?

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Amice
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Fri Nov 11, 2005 10:14 pm
Amice says... · Fri Nov 11, 2005 10:14 pm
How the setting sun
Quietly delights my mind-
Secret of summer.


Haiku : three unrhymed lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables, respectively.


-Amice-
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Jennafina
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Sat Nov 12, 2005 2:17 am
Jennafina says... · Sat Nov 12, 2005 2:17 am
Wow! You're really good at that!

I like the imagery, and how you have really captured the summery spirit. It doesn't sound forced at all.
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Supermal
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Sat Nov 12, 2005 2:28 am
Supermal says... · Sat Nov 12, 2005 2:28 am
I like it. The first two lines are really good, especially. They go really good together.
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