I Am A Little Fly

So I wrote this mostly as a joke. I wish not to offend anyone in any way by how the fly 'lisps'. Being a joke, I don't expect any true reviews. I know full well how terrible the poem is.

(I can do better poetry, but this is an exaggeration.)

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I am a little fly
And I like to dance all night long
And shing a little shong.
Yesh, I have a lishp,
But I'm not afraid to say fish.
I am a little fly
With a little lishp.
I have two feet:
Each wear a cleat.
They fly with me...
Beshide me, you shee.
I am a little, lishping fly
With two sheparate feet.
I am a good little fly.

Yeah, it was cute, and funny... and, well, I sort of want to nitpick it and tell you which lines were unnecessary, and tell you something... I don't know, meaningful, or critical, but I'm afraid you will then roll your eyes and mutter darkly to yourself, "Didn't this idiot realize I was merely joking? That I did not want to hear any criticizations on my absolutely adorable fly poem?!" So, I won't criticize it, really, just give a quick opinion:

This was silly, but… not Shel Silversteen silly, like, you know, silly with a dark, twisted, deep underlying meaning that makes you go, “wow.” It was just… cute.

And, that’s probably all you wanted it to be. So, congrats XD

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Tabby

This was cute and quirky. Personally this poem to me doesn't mean much but it's just weird,funny and a little random. Great job, i believe you have done everything you wanted to achieve.

I have two feet

Maybe try six legs instead.

Very adorable for a joke poem. I adore lisps. it's almost like a british accent, you just want them to say more things. My best friend has a lisp and if you hang around him long enough you'll develop your own lisp. XDD

I wish to inform
mah wittle fwiend
Blue; there's nufin
wong wit chu~
do I wish
you'd not twi
wisps, cause Blue
dey goin be
da deaf o' ju.

Gimmicks are meh, but it was a joke. : )
3 kudos.

XD Ketchup.

And thanks all

Lavvi

I like it! It was funny, querky, and there's not much to critizize. Do you write other poems like this?
-Alex

I like it and I have a slight lishp its more like lissssssssssp with spit.LOL

Hahaha this is cute

Hahaha, I love this. Seriously.