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retrodisco666 · 2010-10-13T19:54:36Z

Shall I throw pennies in a well, making magic wishes? or shall I toss my dreams upon a falling blue star? Should I see a fourtune teller, offer her my palm, watch her deal a deck of brightly coloured cards? I think I have an issue, a problem if you will. My heart is faltering and there is nothing I can do. Beat. Miss a beat, then miss a beat again. I need to know my fate before it gets any worse. I need to know if I will die, or will I get threw the worst. People claim to have broken hearts, but mine just won't work. The machine is hardly beating anymore and I am starting to come to terms. I have written a will and testiment, said all of my good byes. Tonight my heart will beat it's last, and I will surely die. I can not be called a widow, neither can I a bride so when I pass whilst sleeping, I will be as I have been all my life. Alone.

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Thu Jan 20, 2011 3:42 am

poetrymylovely says... · Thu Jan 20, 2011 3:42 am

I thought it was good but there are a few things that were a little bit off. All of my comments have already been pointed out so I won't bother bringing them back up in detail. Basically it was just some punctuation and the whole "threw" and "through" thing. But all in all a pretty good poem.

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