Hey! Good job. loved the title, and the general idea of the poem. About your flow: It seemed very choppy, the way you structured it. It felt a bit more like a story than a poem. Also, the amount of emotions and thoughts that you packed into it made it feel a little heavy, you know what I mean? But I don't really mind it. You had some great metaphors going on though, and the imagery was excellent. So yeah. Well done!
Follow your passion. Stay true to yourself. Never follow someone else's path unless you're in the woods and you're lost and you see a path. By all means, you should follow that. — Ellen DeGeneres
