Hey! Good job. loved the title, and the general idea of the poem. About your flow: It seemed very choppy, the way you structured it. It felt a bit more like a story than a poem. Also, the amount of emotions and thoughts that you packed into it made it feel a little heavy, you know what I mean? But I don't really mind it. You had some great metaphors going on though, and the imagery was excellent. So yeah. Well done!
Edna began to feel like one who awakens gradually out of a dream, a delicious, grotesque, impossible dream, to feel again the realities pressing into her soul. — Kate Chopin, The Awakening
