Poetry fails me I'm a prose kind of person As you can gather.
Once upon a time, there was a man who was allergic to peanuts. He was eating a peanut butter and jelly sandwich by the side of the mountain, and a rock fell on him and he died. Moral of the story: Expect the unexpected. Like fried sushi.
Wow, is this poem short, but it doesn't really matter, does it? Quality is what counts, because it was cute and and funny. I felt as though I could relate to it, because after all, I suck at poetry. You got across a message in 3 lines, which not many people could do.
However, I think it would flow better if you switched the second and third lines which each other. Great job, and keep writing.
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All our dreams can come true — if we have the courage to pursue them. -- Walt Disney
Just call me Ariel. Actually, the poem is a haiku, that's why the flow is a little awkward. I had a devil of a time trying to find a decent 3rd line, that was the best sounding of all of them.
Once upon a time, there was a man who was allergic to peanuts. He was eating a peanut butter and jelly sandwich by the side of the mountain, and a rock fell on him and he died. Moral of the story: Expect the unexpected. Like fried sushi.
Ha ha ha ha! I love it! I am just like you, I actually hate poetry. Well, I don't mind reading it and I can even critique it. But if I were asked to write it, I might die. You did a great job on the haiku, although I had to count the syllables out just to be sure. Thanks for making my day!
I am not addicted to reading, I can quit as soon as I finish one more chapter.
Lovely! I'm the same way, I'm not much for writing poetry. Prose is my thing. I see others have agreed. That's good, people can relate to your poem. People like to feel connected to a poem when they read poetry (or at least I do).
Great job being so creative in such a short little poem. Made me smile.
Surround yourself with people who are serious about being writers, and who will tell you, ‘Hey—you can do better than this.’ Who will be critical of your work, but also supportive. And who will not be competitive in a negative way. — Isabel Quintero
Made me smile.
