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Hypocrisy



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Fri Jun 17, 2005 9:14 am
IGuessImAnUnderwaterThing says...



And she?

She is creating a democracy of ink stains on her fingertips
Waiting for the time to step out into the soft glow of morning
The dim lights casting her face into oblivion
Against the overwhelmingness of the atmosphere
As it breathes smoke and perfume into her face.

She hopes when she leaves they will not dig up the bones
And critisize her for all she could have gotten right
If all the variables had been set in their proper places
Mirror against walls, still,
Another lie still.

She sneezes --
Another addition to the scrapbook.

Thank you,
Mother.
You're just an empty cage girl if you kill the bird.
  





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Fri Jun 17, 2005 5:03 pm
emotion_less says...



This was so different and original... I really enjoyed this.
  





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Fri Jun 17, 2005 6:04 pm
xMyxFinalxAriax says...



I really like this, it's very original. It's very vivid, too. It's very good.
"This world is a cruel place, and we're here only to lose.
So before life tears us apart, let Death bless me with you."


Love is a flame that can't be tamed, and though we are it's willing prey,
my darling, we are not the ones to blame.
  





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Sat Jun 18, 2005 3:26 am
IGuessImAnUnderwaterThing says...



Thank ye both.
You're just an empty cage girl if you kill the bird.
  








If a dog will not come to you after having looked you in the face, you should go home and examine your conscience.
— Woodrow Wilson