I definitely like the end two stanzas, they sealed it for me after i was unsure at the beginning. can I ask, is the last line a quote? or did you just make it up for the piece?
Actually the idea behind this is fantastic, the way science can never express what a human body is, what it can do, and I love the way you use formatting. the "motion" part.
Interesting. I got some random thoughts flittering in my mind in the middle of that. It's intriguing to me, thought I can't say particularly why. However, I did enjoy this very much. Good job!
Silence is a friend who will never betray -- Confucius
Death only comes to those who have truly Fallen --Anonymous
Some people are hourglass shaped, some people are apple shaped, some people are pear shaped, some people are even bean pole shaped, but if we’re not careful we all become banana shaped. This is your gentle posture reminder. — Ranger
