Angels

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Sat Jun 14, 2008 11:09 pm
2018 says... · Sat Jun 14, 2008 11:09 pm
Two angels on the edge of the world.
One am I. One is dead.

One angel on the edge of the world.
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thething912
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Sat Jun 14, 2008 11:26 pm
thething912 says... · Sat Jun 14, 2008 11:26 pm
I don't think there is enough detail in this to be a poem. Plus, it needs more words. I would scarp it. Sorry.
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LilyReagan
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Sun Jun 15, 2008 12:09 am
LilyReagan says... · Sun Jun 15, 2008 12:09 am
Whoa. Um, was that short or was that short?

I would suggest lengthening it, or starting from scratch with the same...theme...I guess.

I love poems about Angels, especially pretty ones, so edit this, maybe, and repost it. Or try again! :D


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Wed Jun 25, 2008 3:57 am
Nolan says... · Wed Jun 25, 2008 3:57 am
Two angels on the edge of the world.

One I am. One is dead.

One angel on the edge of the world.

I like the meaning.
But, it's wayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
too short.

Expand upon it.
Have fun with it.
Explore your writerexuality.
And, yes, I just made that word up.
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