Angels

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Two angels on the edge of the world.
One am I. One is dead.

One angel on the edge of the world.




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I don't think there is enough detail in this to be a poem. Plus, it needs more words. I would scarp it. Sorry.
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Whoa. Um, was that short or was that short?

I would suggest lengthening it, or starting from scratch with the same...theme...I guess.

I love poems about Angels, especially pretty ones, so edit this, maybe, and repost it. Or try again! :D


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Two angels on the edge of the world.

One I am. One is dead.

One angel on the edge of the world.


I like the meaning.
But, it's wayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
too short.

Expand upon it.
Have fun with it.
Explore your writerexuality.
And, yes, I just made that word up.
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Russets and tangerine shades of old gold flushing the very outside edge of the senses ... deep shining ochres, burnt umber and parchments of baked earth—reflecting on itself and through itself, filtering the light.
— Guildenstern (Rosencrantz & Guildenstern Are Dead by Tom Stoppard)