This is very cute but too short to really call a poem. Why don't you try turning it into a haiku (especially seens as it's already about nature) or extending it into a full length poem, with a bit more structure?
Aye, I agree with Alainna. This would be much better as a haiku -- I can't really see it as a full length poem, but that might just be beacuse it's so short. It feels like it should be haiku, though. 'Cause those are short, sweet, to the point, and potentially powerful. Which is what you have here.
*cough* Yes, I'm rambling. Love it.
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