Please offer me some constructive criticism, I haven't written anything in a while and it felt good to get this out of me. Enjoy.
The water looked deep and inviting. Every step she took towards the seashore was answered by a fearsome roar as the waves battered the rocky shore. Just a few minutes before the water had been as still and silent as a tomb, calm enough to reflect the lights of the village. That had all changed once the sea had felt her presence coming towards it. Slowly it had begun to churn its waters in an attempt to entice her. She smiled at this bid for her attention, and knew that these childish waves were only the beginning.
When she arrived at the sea edge, she paused and gazed at the black body of water as her toes hung over the edge of the bare rock. The sea was growing impatient with her, increasing the frequency of its waves and forcing the spray to batter her small body. Each successive white crest becoming higher and more threatening in an attempt to attract her attention.
The girl let down her hair and shook loose her long curls, readying herself. For a second she wondered if she should turn back and go home, the unfamiliarity of what lay before her momentarily paralyzing her with fear. Sensing her reluctance, the sea allowed its waters to still in order to give her time to calm down. Once again the village lights appeared on the still surface of the water, and she smiled as she came to a decision.
Slowly, teasingly, she raised her arms in preparation of the dive, her hands shivering with the apprehension of what was to come. For a second, both sea and girl scrutinized each other, anticipating the moment when they would be joined as one.
Finally, she turned her back on the world behind her and thrust herself into the unknown. Immediately the sea rushed to meet her in a bone crushing hug, a terrifying monster of a wave hurling out of its depths that swallowed her in a freezing blackness. The one thing the sea loved to do most was play, and she was its favourite play thing.
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