Here I go again!
I really like where this is going! The beggining was really good, but now that we see a goal in the story, it's so much better.
I'm trying to figure out what her problem about the salmon is, maybe she's a naturalist, but since it's fantasy, it would mean much more than that, I guess. I'm left hanging here, since we don't have any idea really as to what extent of fantasy your story goes. It's killing me..in a good way
By the way, it doesn't bother me if you PM me..for any fantasy story. I like to review, so you can keep it coming my way!
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