hey
very well written if you ask me.
i didnt really find anything wrong with it except:
Only the best story tellers can give their story a life of its own
story tellers should be one word
hope that helps,
skjold
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hail the aesir and vanir
hail the asatru
You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories. If people wanted you to write warmly about them, they should have behaved better. — Anne Lamott