That Voice

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Author's Note: If you didn't read the first part, I suggest you do because then all of this will make a little bit more sense. I was planning on fleshing out some parts in this chapter, but I wanted to see what you guys thought first. One more thing: This part is a bit dull; sorry about that, but it'll get better =)

~Nariel


Mornings in the townhouse were always freezing. Hank was supposed to get the heaters set up sometime soon. I woke up, shivering slightly, to a hint of sunlight coming through the spaces between my curtains. I yawned and stretched while I looked over the edge of my bed. Jimmy was sprawled out on the floor, apparently sleeping. I shook my head at how comfortable he looked. I never understood why he liked sleeping on the floor. I searched around me for something heavy to chuck at him and my hand made contact with one of the rice filled stuffed animals my mom had made for me. I threw it at his stomach…Hard.

“Ow!” The stuffed animal hit its target.

“Get up,” I told him, “we’re going to be late.”

“That’s because you never set your alarm clock.” Jimmy grumbled. I got up out of bed and grabbed the first thing I saw out of my closet.

“I’ll be in the bathroom. Don’t do anything stupid.” I said.

“I’m still waiting for the day you stop telling me that.” Jimmy called after me.

“Nessa?” I froze. I forgot that my mom was staying home from work today. “Nessa? Who is that?”

What do I say?

“Mom, I think you’re still half asleep; there’s no one here.” I said. I didn’t get a response. I heaved a sigh of relief and quietly made my way back to my bedroom. I saw Jimmy sitting on my bed.

“Keep it down, okay?” I whispered. Jimmy nodded and gave me a tiny smile, like he was trying not to laugh at my stupidity.

I went back to the bathroom and stared at my reflection in the mirror. I made a face at what I saw. My sharp, almost eagle like features were framed by mousy red, thin hair. I really needed my mom to get me some of that thickening shampoo. I pulled my hair up in a ponytail and changed into some army green cargo pants and a fitted white T-shirt. I glanced in the mirror again. This would have to do. I rushed back to my room to find Jimmy right where I left him.

“Okay, are you going to school with me today or are you going to cause trouble here at home?” I asked him. He pondered over that for a second.

“I think I’ll cause trouble at school with you today.” He said with a smirk. I groaned at the evil expression on his face.

“Just get in my head so we can go.” I told him. Jimmy disappeared off my bedroom floor and my head suddenly felt like it was going to explode.

“Ow, watch it Jimmy.” I grimaced.

Sorry. Is this better?

The pain started to subside.

“Yes, much better. Now let’s go.”

After checking on my mom, who was peacefully snoring in her room, I walked out the front door and into the chilly morning.

Big mistake, especially since I didn’t own a jacket as of yet.

“Shoot Jimmy, its cold.” I said while rubbing my hands together.

I wouldn’t know.

“You know, this might be the only time in which I’m actually jealous of you.” I said. I suffered two miles of freezing cold weather until I finally arrived at the high school.

“Okay Jimmy, no distracting me, no rude comments, and absolutely no cracking of jokes when a teacher is lecturing.” I reminded him.

Yeah, yeah, whatever; now you know why I get so bored during the school day.

I ignored him and walked up to the entrance of the school. It was time to act like any normal teenager. As soon as I walked into the school I was almost knocked down by the force of someone running into me.

“Nessa!” a high pitched voice squealed. I felt my head pound painfully. Both Jimmy and I hated high pitched sounds.

“Sydney.” I answered weakly. Another body bumped into me, this time, I had to grab onto Sydney for support.

“Nessa!” This voice wasn’t as high pitched, but it was still annoying.

“Hey Claire.” I said. I was greeted by the same two people everyday. It was nice to know that I was in some kind of routine. Flanked by Sydney and Claire, I started down the long hallway towards my locker.

“So, you won’t believe what we’re doing in theater. My friend’s boyfriend has some sort of relation with the teacher…Cousins I think. Anyways, we’re supposed to be doing this play-“Sydney rambled on and I tried my best to tune her out.

She never stops talking does she?

I made an annoyed sound in the back of my throat and Sydney looked at me quizzically.

“What?” she asked.

“It’s nothing.” I said; so much for being like any normal teenager. I managed to get rid of Sydney and Claire at my locker with a quick excuse.

I leaned my forehead against the cool metal of my locker and tried to clear my head of their mindless chatter.

I don’t understand why you hang out with them.

“It’s not like I have a choice is it?” I muttered to Jimmy.

You could let me register here and then I could hang out with you.

“What would you do when they asked who your parents were?” I asked.

I’d figure something out.

“Very convincing.” I said sarcastically. The bell rang at that moment, except something strange happened. Instead of being loud and defined, as it always was to me, the bell seemed to reach me through a fog. It was a distant sound, barely there. I shook my head sharply, but the sound was still dull. The students around me clamored on, but that sound was also hazy.

What’s going on?

Jimmy’s voice was as clear as ever.

Nessa?

~*~

I never ditched class on my normal days. But, today wasn’t at all normal, so I let it slide. I had spent the last half hour curled over a sink in the bathroom, with Jimmy hovering over me anxiously.

“Jimmy, go away. I don’t need someone to walk in and see you here.” I said hoarsely.

“No. I want to know what’s wrong with you. I’m out of your head, but you’re still sick.” He said. Jimmy started squinting at my face like I was some lab rat that he was testing. I groaned as another sharp pain shot through my head. It had started in first period after the weird incident with my hearing. Everything had gone back to normal, but then my head started to kill me.

“Jimmy,” I had whispered in pain, “what are you doing?”

I’m not doing anything. But whatever’s happening , it hurts.

I had rushed to the bathroom as soon as the bell rang; the pain was getting to be point of being unbearable.

“Maybe you should go home.” Jimmy suggested, snapping me out of my thoughts. I shook my head.

“Just give me a couple minutes and I’ll be fine.” I reassured him. Jimmy started fidgeting with the paper towel machine in agitation.

“It’s been thirty minutes since you first bent over that sink, Nessa. I think you should go home.”

I grimaced. I hated it when Jimmy used his “I’m in charge” voice. I pursed my lips as I thought it over. There was definitely no chance in me getting better throughout the rest of my classes. I glanced at Jimmy and stuck my tongue out at him.

“You win,” I told him, “will you let me go to the nurse? My mom won’t be happy if I just turn up on the doorstep.”

Jimmy gave me his best smirk and made his way back into my head, carefully, this time.

~*~

My bedroom ceiling swirled in and out of focus as I tried to lie still on my bed. The task was nearly impossible. Another wave of nausea washed over me and I curled into a ball.

Are you sure you don’t want me to get out? I could go somewhere else. I don’t have to hang out here all day.

“Don’t worry about it Jimmy,” I gasped in pain as I felt Jimmy’s annoyance. It seemed that even the slightest bit of emotion from either one of us could affect the pain as much as a single movement could. But, I couldn’t let Jimmy out on his own. It was on the top of my “Don’t Do Even If You’re Dying” list. The danger of Jimmy getting into some kind of trouble was just too great. And some of it was just me not trusting him.

Somewhere in between my worries about Jimmy and the pain, I passed out. I didn’t even know that I had passed out until I woke up to a different kind of pain. Instead of being very painful, this whole experience had just turned into: the worst pain I had ever felt in my life.

I threw my head back and let out an agonized scream.
It's the very witching time of night.




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I like it, but I'd like to know more about Nessa's personality. I know that there's someone in her head, but more information about how she deals with her school life, friends, and family would be nice. You've covered all the other bases, I think, and done a good job of it to. You hava a very new idea.
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i really like this and the idea is a new one, keep on writing more of this i would love to read more of it.
if any critisism i would like to know more about jimmy, how he got to be in her head and why he can come in and out like that
but so far really good!




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Isn't the mind-talk two-way? You'd think, if she had someone in her head, she'd be able to speak telepathically with him.



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