Young Writers Society

*bows* Thanks for reading. It's been fun.

^_^ Keek out!

Good, interesting and I want to find out more.

I am very intrigued. It appears this Kent fellow has some sort of power with words. Very interesting.

Some words of advice: be careful how you try to physically describe him. This is always tricky. All we know now is that his eyes are blue, and that didn't seem important.

The insults don't seem extraordinarily shocking. They sound rather childish. I would work on something a little more clever. Or maybe build up the stiff tension in the room so an insult is more shocking.

ukgurl@hart wrote:Some words of advice: be careful how you try to physically describe him. This is always tricky. All we know now is that his eyes are blue, and that didn't seem important.

The insults don't seem extraordinarily shocking. They sound rather childish. I would work on something a little more clever. Or maybe build up the stiff tension in the room so an insult is more shocking.

You're right, his eye colour doesn't seem very significant. It just comes to me now that I have yet to even decide what Kent looks like. >.< Time to do that and get it in there.

Thanks for the advice. You're right, Kent's insults aren't very clever. But I think I may just change the reaction rather than the insults themselves. Kent is childish, so it would make sense that his insults reflect that. But you're right, some things need to be fixed. Thanks.